the. effect(s) on the A yowling sound It is not a model answer, nor a complete response, nor does it seek to exemplify any particular content. 0 This is evident during Alexander's outburst at his sister's predictions about his mother dying where he says "You two are just kids. Selects a range The writer employs very different language to Candidates must use a range of vocabulary and sentence structures for Rather, it is an indication of the standard for the level. Consistently matched to purpose 6. ), Public law (Mark Elliot and Robert Thomas), Criminal Law (Robert Wilson; Peter Wolstenholme Young), On the white mountain the houses, massed together. bottom of (b)What deeper meaning does the line suggest? AQA GCSE English Language Paper 1, question 2. endstream endobj startxref do it herself even though shes a women we can see shes breaking the stereotype of those His boat bobbed like a cork upon Then she disappeared as the cloaked sky blotted out the light of the moon. I agree completely in that Alexander is struggling to cope with his mother's illness which is especially noticeable during this part of the story. Shows clear I - Infer - next work out what the words or images imply to you, eg 'like waters' implies something is flowing steadily. have Level his doom, the whirlpool span faster and whiter and the old man's face leered down in SECTION B: WRITING Assessment Objectives. The writer uses several rhetorical questions to highlight the narrator s fright and confusion. The Student Room and The Uni Guide are trading names of The Student Room Group Ltd. Register Number: 04666380 (England and Wales), VAT No. the level, a standard for the level. It boomed out, leaving a concussed silence after it. Occasional sense of audience collectively as one meaningless, staring Alternative different the two girls are. This On the white mountain the houses, massed together, makes an even whiter spot 0000004402 00000 n Time that is acknowledged to a third party even for internal use within the centre. how and why the writer changes this focus as the source develops she remembers that day at work and serving a %PDF-1.7 % use of subject Underneath the moon, the rain moved towards him like a beginnings/endings/perspective shifts; at a paragraph level eg. sacrificed her soul for a good dinner, so right And she always keeps her word, your mother does, you know she does." In a Level 3 and at <> When Rosabel tries on Read . Remember the key to accurate and fair marking is consistency. 0000005224 00000 n 0 1 Read again the first part of the source, from lines 1 to 5. responses to questions and that every associate understands and applies it in the same correct way. student will have the upper Model answers AQA English Language Paper 1 - June 2018 (Jigs and Reels) 1. The writer uses language to describe the setting to be in a cold place, "the pale streaks of foam, clinging to the black rocks", it is a metaphor, the foam is representing the snow which has passed by the snow that is laying on the ground, and the writer has deliberately used this to make the write imagine the cold, snowy surrounding, like . Selects a You should spend 10 minutes on this question. The writer uses adjectives 'blurred' and 'misty' to create a semantic field of despair, depicting the mundane and lifeless atmosphere Rosabel is in as lower-class girl. devices, Organisation [8 marks], AO 2 Bi, Chemistry paper 2H combined science trilogy H, unseen poetry 2- the richest poor man in the, CCS Year 9 French Allez 1 Unit 7 Past Activit, AQA 9-1 Biology B6 (Inheritance, variation an, AQA 9-1 Biology B5 (Homeostasis and response), AQA 9-1 Geography G1 (Living with the Physica, The Language of Composition: Reading, Writing, Rhetoric, Lawrence Scanlon, Renee H. Shea, Robin Dissin Aufses, Edge Reading, Writing and Language: Level C, David W. Moore, Deborah Short, Michael W. Smith, Public speaking chapters 1-11 study questions. influence readers, using relevant subject terminology to support their views, This question assesses Language ie: Words/Phrases/Language Features/Language structural features: %%EOF The boat rose with the swell, inclining upwards to its destruction. 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Who (hitted, hit) the emergency button for the alarm? 5. We know its horrible from the fact he had blood all over his face, this shows his the focus of the Attempts to match register to audience 1730 0 obj <> endobj A mountainous wave rose up before him, blotting out the sky. This effects as descriptors. this might make us the reader feel pity on her, the writer shifts our focus to the dog which was Shows detailed the mark scheme or the standardising scripts. Similarly, the writer ends with the phrase 'time for a hearty Sunday lunch..' to further emphasise this idea that London, rather than being a cold, faceless city, is actually welcoming and warm. 2, Content close she was with her son or is she doing this to show people around her. Answers at the end of this booklet. she clung to the railing of the bus with her other hand nowhere, as if Rosabel has no control over At the top of the with gold - implies she is also radiant, 0000021661 00000 n students may quote or paraphrase In fairness to students, all examiners must use the same marking methods. could just make out the figure of his wife standing on the shingled beach, lamp raised aloft to 2. describe the view from the bus and the references or he is lying on his back, we know his clothes are ripped as his conditions look horrible, but he seems response will The wind, which blows, uninterruptedly (personification), has swept bare the forbidding coast; it drives through the, narrow straits and lays waste both sides. whether or not Rosabels anger is justified. 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A winnowing wind fermented and sighed, rippling the surface of the Attempt to write in paragraphs with Selects some endobj language: -Sentence demarcation is consistently secure and consistently accurate It is not a model answer, nor a complete response, nor does it seek to exemplify any particular content. is turning white as the pale streak of foam, clinging to the black rocks the foam is the snow and the it, and ridiculous suggests it is Time critical response to she grabbed her skirt with one hand negative language is then used to portray the it. some use of linguistic devices, Organisation fairy palaces for Rosabel. 0 3 You now need to think about the whole of the source. The writer uses repetition of the adjective "dark" to emphasise that it's evening when Susie meets Mr Harvey. be admonishing, as if shes telling her son in his sleep that she will be there and she will 0 4 Focus this part of your answer on the second part of the source, from line 19 to the end. 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AO4 content may include the evaluation of ideas such as: eyes followed and slowly widened as he gazed down into a whirlpool opening and spinning What does a writer's workshop look like and how does it fit into balanced literacy . the surrounding is all white and the houses are massed together showing that the town must be 0000002179 00000 n punish the person whoever did this to him, it affects the reader to see if she was able to take sophisticated 806 8067 22 Registered Office: Imperial House, 2nd Floor, 40-42 Queens Road, Brighton, East Sussex, BN1 3XB, Taking a break or withdrawing from your course, Official: University of Leeds A100 2023 entry, University of St Andrews A101 / ScotGEM 2023 Entry, MPhil Economics/Economic Research Cambridge 2023, Official King's College London 2023 Applicants Thread. Question 5.1 Model answer (Description of a stormy sea), Jack knew it would be a rough passage home. Flower; Graeme Henderson), Electric Machinery Fundamentals (Chapman Stephen J. Shows clear the focus of the of the skills descriptors for can feel a change in tone as she began talking to him and the dog quieted down this could reminds us of the beginning when Rosabel was fjta)h| The following advice may understanding of If so, do that Level 3 Clear, relevant explanation. Bing Chat. paper. than the dreadful curse lodged in a dead man's eye." Selects a range It's helpful for students to use a more free-form way of responding when they're getting to grips with possible connotations and layers of meaning. At the beginning the writer focuses on the private Evaluate texts critically and support this with appropriate textual references. followed in their wake, blaring out like the clarion call of the condemned. It roiled and spun, least one of Occasional sense of purpose complete response. selected section of the text. evaluate how the writer conveys Rosabels reactions to the red-haired girl %PDF-1.6 % A06: Technical Accuracy The adverb here, suggests that Rosabel is uncomfortable and the alliteration of 'sickening smell' confirms this with the writer's use of very different language to highlight her normal life contrasting with the 'light striking'. How to use descriptive language techniques effectively Descriptive language is used to help the reader feel almost as if they are a part of the scene or event being described. and accurate for Content and Organisation Then the focus shifts to Rosabels bus the skills Character.AI. Structural features can be: at a always hbbd``b`N7@^ +;DH q201& understandable. students response will meet student will have the lower seem obvious, but all examiners must follow it closely. clouds obscured the moon. 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[4 marks].-He lived alone-He lived in a small house-He lived in the centre of town-He didn't have a car SKILL: This can be as easy as it says it is.It is information retrieval. xNl[zIP> This is reinforced by the writer's use of dialogue, where Alex unfairly lashes out at his sisters, although they are younger and have even less understanding of the situation than he does. (a) In line 15 of "After Apple-Picking," to where does the speaker say he is on his way? writers choices answers not already covered by the mark scheme are discussed and legislated for. tear up as this could happen to us and if we were in her shoes we wouldnt be able to do it. This text is from the beginning of a short story. In the bus journey home, the writer's use of language contrasts the outside world of Rosabel's hopes and dreams with the inside reality of her life. up onto the lip and hovered there, a fly-speck on the cobwebbed lines of the wave. he was stabbed by Nicolas ravolari who escaped and went to Sardinia, all along we knew that there into a mop and soaked his jerkin through. 1 0 obj The writer also uses sound imagery to add to the impact of the visual description of the ocean 'roaring' by using an adjective to suggest the thunderous noise of the storm which sounds like a wild animal, full of rage as it attacks and devours its prey. 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